Wow, your ideas really are so creative. Again, well done, especially to fit this into a newly learned form ( which your syllables are spot on )

I liked the flow of it aswell, I know I struggle to make forms flow like this and feel they are too choppy, but you made the flow good on this one.

I also like the message of what will be, will be, whether we want it it or not. The plans are already there, we have to accept that and let them happen.