by Alanis Mar 31, 2013
category :
Dark, fantasy /
unexplained
The pitter patter of the rain marks my escape but as the light consumes the Shadows my soul is yet to be saved. My heart dwells in the past but no longer can I bare the truth of my witnesses, as I am put to rest my eternal shadow traces the earth. What is left of my mortality? Who have I yet to face? I drink from this casket as a prisoner of my defeat, trapped in my own yellow haze. |
by Baby Rainbow
I really love the meaning in this poem, I think you have a great talent for wording, and portraying the imagery in poetry, but again try to work on your layout and punctuation more. You will get a lot more readers and followers, when they can come and read your poem clearly without having to stumble on when to pause and stop one image, and follow on with another image. |
by WintersAngel
Awesome poem :) |