Chelsey, lately, you've been writing these poems that I think you feel you need to pen but I have a sense of them being restricted, you're adding some nice metaphors and deep thinking, but I think you need to relax the poetry a bit and let yourself release that tension, those thoughts because I know you've tons more to say.

I know often we ponder too much on what we want and what we need and sometimes the two become confused with each other, and the longing for love, and comfort becomes a need to have it although you know it isn't what is best, and sometimes you try and drive yourself away but you're always pulled back by what was there...its a matter of choice and deciding, taking chances but evaluating what may happen if you've made the wrong choice.

Keep writing, just let yourself more freedom, and trust yourself
x

Beautiful write there is a lot of feelings there

I would remove the comma after normalcy in the very beginning.. it seems almost like it's too strong a pause and it makes me feel like the next piece is fragmented. Just my picky a-- nature :) hahaha

I love the ending where it says "Like I need you". It's like you're telling yourself you don't, but you know you do and you hate that. You're not supposed to be consumed or wrapped up with the thoughts of someone else and you just can't help it.

I really like how you kept the theme of warmth throughout the poem. It tied together really well here. I keep reading the part with 'therein lies the irony'. I LOVE that line, and I keep reading it over and over.

This is really a great poem about being all consumed and not wanting to be -- something I know all of us can relate to!

This is a beautiful piece but I think Tara Kay is right... There's so much more you could say. I mean yes you write stunning things as always but they just don't really seen like you... Or not you, but they aren't all of you.

Good job. Wonderful.

Hello Chelsea,

I find the psychological imagery in this poem very satisfying. In my opinion it can be very difficult to pen something so intangible so kudos to you.

My only criticism is that it feels unfinished to me, like there is an epiphany on the way but it just hasn't arrived yet.

Still really enjoyed it though. Keep it up!

Your writes always take me to a memory... If ever I need to visit them, I read your poetry..

This attraction is a beautiful kind of elegance.. I feel it in every line.. It also, however makes me sad, because its almost like your telling yourself this will never happen or cant happen.. when we love someone in a distance, afraid to confront with true feelings, for fear of being hurt, its a sadness like no other... this is my take on it...

I can't begin to break it down any further... just a touching piece Chels!!

Wow Chels! This is beautiful... I was captivated from the start to finish... I really love your word choice, metaphors and similes! You have a way with describing and comparing your emotions to interesting elements... like the photosynthesis part was so clever and I love that you mentioned that.

I really enjoyed the opening stanza. I like how you mentioned your brain is claustrophobic and full of thoughts of this person. That was an interesting description.

Well done! Amazing poem.

I read this poem as that moment right before you fall for someone, you go through so many thoughts, questioning every little thing about your relationship, you feel as though you need them in your life and can't live without them. You visualize what everything would be like, could there be a future with them or not. It's not obsessive, but more of like an addiction I guess. We feel as though our mind is all over the place, hence the 'crazy'..The warmth they bring is something you've never felt, it feels so wonderful when they are near you. Yet in the end you have to think what's best for you, do you really really need this, or should you perhaps try to erase them from your mind before it's too late. I know the feeling all too well. I guess it's our vulnerability, we don't wish to get hurt but should we anyways since we might if we take the risk?

You've really grown as a writer over the years, your style has developed into something unique and specific to you. You have a really nice poem here, very easy to connect to. Well done!

I love this. really well written piece.