by Jenni Marie Apr 4, 2013
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
These lovers constantly at war |
by Piogga
Ahh this is such a lovely poem, Jenni. I could read it again and again. It seems simple and easy to write while reading but I agree: it's hard to think of something that won't be cliche, at the same it has to rhyme. and the thing about repetition with these kinds of forms is that the line you choose shouldn't bore/annoy the reader. The simplicity of the title works so well too. Great job!! |
by Britt
Triolet is a really hard form, because you have to be able to get lines that mesh well together without being cliche, or without being irritating with their repetition... and THEN worry about rhyme! lol You picked the perfect words here.. my favorite line is the 'in love; alas it can not be'. I really adore the use of "alas".. it was creative to see. The poem itself is really quite sad and I know so many people/relationships/marriage like this. It's just not supposed to be that hard!.. but at the same time good things are worth fighting for. Awesome triolet! :) |
Amazing form, such a simple inspiration yet perfect. You picked the perfect words in which when repeated they flowed very well. Also a rhyming form which makes it harder, for me at least. :P Sad but really lovely form, you did excellent! :) |
This was superium, wonderful job with this poem!! 100/100 |