The Final Days- Entry One.

A lovely darkness spreads crossed frozen earth
it's a peaceful night in the sounds of nothing,
comforting lost with burdens, personal nature
reaching fingers grip firmly, hands that need to be held.
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I love the way you have set the scene with an array of descriptions that create painted images on the canvas in my mind. It is truly a great technique. I like the way you described earth as frozen and ended this stanza which hands that need to be held - it displays this need for togetherness and community especially in dark times.

Sorrow weighs heavy in the minds of grief
causing heart to experience loneliness,
the only solace is blank parchment and faded
ink, just enough to write the existence of one more tear.
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Wow this stanza is so deep and takes on another level altogether.
I think the second line heart needs to be hanged to hearts to make it more of a plural concept but apart from that I like th way you have described the difficulty of accessing solace which reinforces this need for togetherness in the times of need.

A final chapter deserves to be written
as a new twinkle awaits a precious heart,
her eternal home is adorned with petals
and the sky never shadows, moon will guide.
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I love the shift in mood this stanza creates transforming light from the darkness and providing hope. To me you words have painted over a black canvas with colours using words such as new twinkle, precious, adorned, petals and guide.

It is a lovely darkness tonight, but a lonely one.
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This line jaxtaposes high and low emotions which is an interesting way to end a poem.

Great poem
Thanks for sharing
5/5 from me

I don't want to go into this poem, because I know it is deep and the title itself just brought me to tears, for I knew what it was about, I knew the pain that would be pushed into this piece, and by golly, there was a lot of it...you are just a beautiful heart, and your spirit is not even comprehend-able...

Just write, and let it all out, pen it, and acknowledge it and then just breathe...

I love you...
hugs xxx