You've Got a Hold on Me

by Rythmer21   Apr 6, 2013


Don't crawl into my thoughts I don't want you to,
for when I think of this big world all I see is you.
But you're so caught up in all you do,
and you don't have the time to think it through.

Don't let me catch hope rising in the distance,
when you're coming to break it down.
You'll lead me on and I'll believe,
but then I'll realize it was all in the tease

Thus fear comes when I think of you,
because there is so much that you could do.
You have no clue, you are so unaware
of all that I hope for that we can share.

Love is something to treasure and hold on to.
Its not a toy to play games with.
Is it real or is it a myth?
I never know when I'm around you.

Don't let there be hope; let it be real.
Don't take my heart; it's not for the steal.
Lose your grip, your hold on me,
and let me be finally set free!

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  • 11 years ago

    by average thoughts

    I loved this poem..perfect..
    And abt d advice, jus do as darren said..

    • 11 years ago

      by Rythmer21

      Thanks! :) I changed it, does it sound OK to you now?

  • 11 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    Wow, this is intense, so powerful with emotion, I loved it, I find the way you opened it up into the beginning was very well done, two thumbs up

  • 11 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    Wow, this is intense, so powerful with emotion, I loved it, I find the way you opened it up into the beginning was very well done, two thumbs up

  • 11 years ago

    by Rythmer21

    Anyone have any more advice or critique on this poem? It's interesting to here what people think and it helps me become a better writer! :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Rythmer21

    Do you mean, "Don't let there be hope, let it be real."
    Instead of, "Don't let me hope, let it be real"?
    If so, I do think I like that better.

    Thanks for the encouragement! This is the first poem I have ever submitted. :)