Hmm let's see,

This is only my opinion and I'm not a professional writer so feel at ease and also feel free to overlook it.

I felt the rhyme scheme took away from this poem. There are some good images, ( the pancakes in the morning and maple syrup yum!!) but then there were parts that at least to me felt that were thrown out there to continue with the rhyme scheme. I know this is describing the journey of the American worker. But hmm I m not sure how to explain, it was well done for the most part but I do feel it needs a little bit more, to narrate a little bit more, I like the beginning and the ending... The middle part is the part were I feel may need some more description. ( that's could just be me and reading at 3 am) so I'll be back when I'm fully awake.

I love the rhyme and rhytym in your poems Robert as I do this one :) Its got like a "swing to it! :D

Love the story told too. Keep pennin 'em!

~ Olwin