Breath

by WintersAngel   Apr 15, 2013


My breath has grown shallow.
Blood pools around me.
The knife slips from my fingers.
Hitting the floor loudly.

No one has noticed my absence.
They truly don't care.
I'll be dead minutes from now.
Happiness waits for me there.

My silent screams were unheard.
Nobody saw the pain.
The fake smile I put on my face.
Was enough to make me look plain.

I lose feeling in my hands and feet.
The feeling comforts me.
I know exactly what I am doing.
Fading out of this world softly.

Numbing sensations spread through my body.
I am close to the end.
Darkness takes over my vision.
Time to forget pain and let joy begin.

As I take my last breath
Death calls to me.
His scream echoes in my ear.
Welcoming me to his sea.

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  • 11 years ago

    by Austin

    I like what you had going here, but I would have like to have seen a little more flow. personal taste though.

    I lose feeling in my hands and feet.
    The feeling comforts me. (i would have added NOW comforts me). A couple other stylistic things. I personally would have played more on the breath concept to, maybe the shallow breath inhaled like the lies you told the world blame cant be placed here all my attempts have failed and as my breath goes out, staggered fading slow, maybe with this last breath, you'll notice my feelings, they'll show.

  • 11 years ago

    by Treehugger

    Wow, again you blow me away with your words. Very powerful and sad piece. Its hard living life like this, sometimes we find comfort in some dark places. The rhyming and flow was perfect. wouldnt change anything 5/5

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