Wow, again you blow me away with your words. Very powerful and sad piece. Its hard living life like this, sometimes we find comfort in some dark places. The rhyming and flow was perfect. wouldnt change anything 5/5

I like what you had going here, but I would have like to have seen a little more flow. personal taste though.

I lose feeling in my hands and feet.
The feeling comforts me. (i would have added NOW comforts me). A couple other stylistic things. I personally would have played more on the breath concept to, maybe the shallow breath inhaled like the lies you told the world blame cant be placed here all my attempts have failed and as my breath goes out, staggered fading slow, maybe with this last breath, you'll notice my feelings, they'll show.