In the 3rd paragraph or what ever it is in the 2nd line I believe you mean they not the lol Other wise I love it!! 1000/10 very good job. |
Kelwin I think you mean 100/100, lol, but fantastic poem, I truly loved it, it really spoke out in depths to the reader, wonderful poem, you are truly talented beyond words!!! |
No I mean 1000/10 it's so good |
by Treehugger
This is good. I love how you decribed weather as death and all the ways you decribed suicide <3 |
Wow.. my favorite stanza is |
Death is nothing more and nothing less we live to die and we die to live born into a world called gods last given gift before he pasted and perished away we are just little people in a giant world trying to live each day as if it was our last we have too look into the future and not look back into our past =) i like your poems they have so much description. |
Death is nothing more and nothing less we live to die and we die to live born into a world called gods last given gift before he pasted and perished away we are just little people in a giant world trying to live each day as if it was our last we have too look into the future and not look back into our past =) i like your poems they have so much description. |
by chloe
I love the line `Black rain takes over the flood.`So good such a emotionless story but the poem is filled with feeling , love it! |
by Nick
This is a great poem! I love how the first four stanzas repeated "here," it gives an interesting new perspective on depression-- that it is more than just emotion, your mind is in an entirely different place. I also like how you used short sentences for each line, it really speaks to the spirit of depression. |
by Erick Neal
Very powerful and deep words. Enjoyed the read. |