Anyone have any thoughts? I need some help editing. Should I leave stanza 2 and 5 or take them out. I wrote them in, thinking I might turn this into more of a song. Any comments or advice would be appreciated!

I just went thru a tough break up. i think this sums up how she feels. who knows about the future but your finality is very powerful here. 2 and 5 are good. leave them in. they reiterate your attempts and the way your feel. good stuff

It's very cute but it sounds forced to me... while both the rhyme and the way it flowed was wayyy to forced in my mind i think that the emotions in the poem are intense and i should think that although you went through a breakup you should be able to bounce back when the time is right and i hope you the best! :) 5/5

Queen Ashlin

Wow, I love how there is no order ot pattern to how long your lines are on each verse compared to the next, really sets a great lay-out! You truly write very beautifully, two thumbs up!