This is why I like you. You can't just fly through your poems and leave a comment. You have to read it slowly, or multiple times. Either what you're saying is deep, or you grasp the reader by the shirt collar and hold them there reading it repeatedly. Icakjshdajsd can't explain you, woman.

This is a sensual piece. It's worded so precisely, and so detailed.

"Tangle your lies
between our pretzel
shaped limbs,"

Obviously, the lover is leading the speaker on - either while they are in bed, or to get the speaker into bed. It's such a fabulous wording. I love the pretzel imagery.

"tattoo whispered syllables
across my forgiving lips;"

Sensual, aklshdjkas holy almost smut. This is like pornetry. xD Not in the sense that this is explicitly sexual, it's so poetic - I can't find a word to describe it. Like if someone is obsessed with rainbows, they call some rainbow that is incredible, rainbowporn. I can't even. Just ignore my stupid ranting. But really, I can't. This is such beautiful wording. The lover's lips against the speaker's, breathing lies and promises of love while in bed - and the speaker knows clearly that their lover is lying.

"Tonight,
my heart
is on standby -"

And by that, I hear, "Tonight, I could care less if my feelings are hurt tomorrow, because right now - this is it for me." It sounds like surrender to me. It's passionate, and sad, really.

"unsure if daybreak
will hold a sun-kissed future
or just the aftermath
of you."

"I don't know if you'll be here when I wake up, and you'll want to stay with me, or I'll just have the memory, or we'll go back to a tumultuous relationship." That's why I got from here.

This is seriously fabulous. I love the title as well!

Hannah...You just set my heart on fire, made it ache for you...and made me remember a lot of failed relationships...seriously though, what else can I say that Linda there hasn't already said...

I loved the title....and the way you worded this, the flow was flawless and it really had that tone of a missed love, and fear, and uncertainty...

You're awesome....I loved it!
x

You can't deny the sheer talent you posses ...
I love every word it's so heart felt

Your words really do hit home .

Another piece of magic by you

What to say what to say... i read this one a number of times and had a great number of varied interpretations, which is good. it means that pretty much anyone who reads it stands an excellent chance of a personal take-away.

i hate myself for saying this, but being in college, and given how extraordinarily commonly it happens around me(though i do not myself partake) it reads structurally like a one night stand.

we start of with this kind of lying and falsification of the self representation (very probably on his side) coupled with the sensuali feeling of "pretzel shaped limbs" which to me implies... well... beyond just intertwining.... you know. then we move very quickly, and quickly is tantamount to this interpretation, to indelibility, uncertainty, and a kind of... not sure how to phrase it. just "i wonder if he'll wake up happy and this will continue to a relationship, or be a hurtful arsehole and leave immediately."

^^^ this was all just an initial thought, and passed pretty quickly from my mind when i read deeper into some parts of the poem.

"tattoo whispered syllables
across my forgiving lips;"

this was, to me, genius. at first it almost doesnt make sense, and that made me read it a lot more carefully the second time. "tattoo" has a sense of indelibility, it doesnt change its just this connotation of permanence, followed by a word like "whispered"... with connotations of silent, and hushed.... shared between only two people, or perhaps even just no one. you follow it, though, with "across my forgiving lips"... so it is verbal... then it hit me. this is like saying "i love you". its private, especially at first, its something you whisper to your lover and hope to hear in return, but as hushed as it is, its so indelible, you cant just take those kinds of words back and erase them. coupling it with "tattoo" and "forgiving" gives further depth, its more than just you saying it, its you MEANING it, further, its you meaning it even though hes either hurt you in the past, or you understand that he will probably hurt you in the future.

again, genius.

the last stanza ends on a powerful note too, a theme ive really started to notice with you.

"sun-kissed future" has a hopeful, happy, sunny disposition. the word kissed further implies continuation or start of a relationship.

contrasted with
"or just the aftermath
of you" which has a critically destructive note, i think almost nuclear explosion-grade damage, but you seem to accept it almost casually, as if its more toward what you expect, or have experienced previously.

all in all, my second impression was of this piece represents the imminent end of a relationship, you think it might be coming, a break up feels imminent and theres a lot of in fighting and passive aggressiveness, and if he has a sudden tendency to change, you might never know when the breakup is coming, but it can lead to some really tense and uncertain feelings.

Going to my favorites :) not much to say. but it was great. loved everything about it. it was all put well together .

Amazing blend of romantic imagery with a touch of emotion