Really enjoyed reading and delving into all that you brought up in such few lines.
"Opaque flames burst from the violent horizon
And hearts break in unison as lifeless bodies
Plummit to the hard stone floor. innocent children
Left to rust in the pouring rain and adultry is that
Of the common."
- "Opaque flames" was a powerful image to start out with and is easy to picture. It made me think right away that there is nothing clear to see, that this horizon has somehow obscured true light and hope. Instead, it's turned the land into a war.
"Plummit" should be "plummet".
It was neat, and a bit morbid, how you portrayed the children as "rusting" like they are decaying. The way you wrote it seemed brutal and honest, as if whoever committed this acts, or if it was cause of a natural disaster, had no regard that they were humans who had souls.
The part of "adultery is that of the common" seemed a bit awkward with this short line, maybe put "and adultery that is of the common". I think just the placing of "is" and "that" seemed off?
I also have a quick suggestion for you. Whenever you're continuing a sentence or thought onto the second line, don't capitalize the first letter. Then after a period such as with "innocent", you could capitalize the "i" because you're moving on to the next thought.
Demons possess the hearts of the
Weak and the wise flee with prudence. Tales of marriage
Are that of childrens fables and hatred is fashion.
Who are we to believe? The pearls of the rich or the
Ashes of the poor?
"childrens" should have an apostrophe.
"hatred is fashion"- very provoking line. It definitely raises the question of respect to all or just letting our anger and emotion take control. What will become of the future generations?
Good tie in at the end with that final question and then going further to direct our concern with status, social classes, as well as who we are giving our trust to.
Liked the title as well, it had that darkness to it and something as shiny and alluring as a pearl is covered with that murky smoke, ashes.
Don't forget to check grammar and spelling.... otherwise, great write involving life issues. Keep writing!