I love the word choice you used, outstanding poem, fabulous job!!! But for the most part I am speechless |
I never knew that there was a carousal spelled with an 'a' and carousel spelled with an 'e'...In this poem I feel as though you mean carousal with an a because it's defined as a 'drunken spree' which perhaps is what this seems like? But I do like how it can work both ways, because the beginning makes me think of a carousel you see at fairs how you're going around it, 'tangled in knots' 'lips twirling in spirals of illusive lies' ...such wonderful images, really gives that type of a carousel a great affect. I liked also how 'sullen' and 'crestfallen' sounded together, it was kind of an odd sound but definitely alliterative with the 'en'...I thought you did a great job with the challenge, I loved how the words were incorporated, carousal should have definitely been one, if it wasn't? I don't recall, but it is a good one! Perfectly describes your state of mind in this poem, the emotions you're going through and feeling. Lovely work :) |