Twisted

Great write.

I feel like the title Twisted definitely reflects this. It seems as though you're swirled within a bit of melancholy yet also dreams sprawled about. I agree with Jenni on the utopia, arctic isle part of the poem, they are contradictory and not sure they belong next to each other, the thoughts don't connect for me. You did a lovely job with the challenge, it's nice to see something from you! It's hard to cram so many specific words into such a little piece but you seemed to do quite well with it. Nice job with this!

Short, but very well written, I see nothing wrong with it, great poem

Yay. You took my title...I guess I do have more imagination than you do...even though I just chose a random used word for it. Haha.

I told you I would comment once the contest was over so here we go:

Okay, I'll admit I really didn't expect something like this, especially knowing how little you have wrote poetry before now, and especially with the rules/restrictions etc for the challenge...I.E-not just writing whatever you wished to.

I actually think you managed to choose such perfect words that could be combined together from the compiled list in the thread in M&M.

"Sullen and nostalgic feelings
in a blue ocean of melancholy"

^^Love this. So perfect together, and such beautiful imagery created within these few lines.

I'm really fond of the use of "blue" as it gives added visuals, though at the same time I would maybe consider using a different colour to describe... maybe grey (Stormy?)

Loved the use of reflecting so close to midnight. Makes me picture the moon in the water in the lion king 2 for some reason? hahaha.

"Utopia of a previous memory"

This doesn't make much sense. Utopia means paradise etc..so I get what you are trying to say, but I don't think it is phrased in the context you were meaning?

"drinking Martini like a divinity "

Favourite line. For obvious reasons known to both of us.

"twirling around a twisted rebirth "

Ahhhh. Love this too. Love the subtle alliteration in this line, and "twirling" is one of my favourite words along with "spiralling" as of late. Love, love, love it!

All in all...I think you did a wonderful job with this!