Comments : Close your eyes

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    I like the ending the most,

    There is something strange on this one:s

    But if you look around you just might find
    Me holding out my hand

    ^^ is it my hand or your hand? But if you look around, you just might find me holding out your hand.

    I think that's how i pictured it base on the rest of the poem. I mean it's a bit strange to find yourself holding out your hand XD... Specially since I feel a feeling of reassurance that everything will be okay.

    • 11 years ago

      by Robert

      Depends on who your giving this poem to really. In this case it would be me holding out my hand to you. Or you could think of it has someone houlding out their hand to you when your feeling down.

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    Ah, haha no wonder.

    You know, when I read that line.

    but if you look around, you just might find me holding out my hand.

    ^^ I picture let's say "you" holding out your hand.... holding your hand. So it didn't make sense or at least it sounded strange. I mean why would you hold your own hand? that was my thought.

    But now that I know it's holding out my hand to you then that makes a whole lot of sense.

    Also my bad, I was so distracted by that line that I didn't pay attention to the line that follow. It's more explained with that one.

  • 11 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    This poem almost reads like a song :) It is so beautifully worded and expressed. I actually love the part that says ....

    "So just take my hand and ill hold you close"

    it is the sentiment of the whole poem I think... That you are offering your hand of friendship, strength and love to this person. That you will hold them close, taking their sadness way.

    I loved this poem a lot!

    As always very heartouching :)
    Well done Robert and keep penning! :))