by Lifesbreath Apr 24, 2013
category :
Life, society /
faith, religion
Courage is to look |
I'm so glad you took my advice, just the addition of a little bit of punctuation makes this poem 10x powerful! Great job!!! |
I'm with Hannah, this is a very powerful write. You stick with the title 'courage' well, expressing that throughout the piece. I'm glad you have adding some punctuation, like I said before it's guiding the reader to notice the important parts that you want to hit with a BANG. |
Very inspirational, Danny! |
by Lifesbreath
Oh your punctuation is right on and makes this poem so much better! When it come to "the judgement" it effects everyone arouind me sort of heightens me to make the right decisions and just for not just my own benefit. "My judgement" a very stand alone hero message is sexy but not so much left to lose. |