Oooh i both had shivers and a big evil smile on my face! gosh i LOVE how this poem i could see in my mind the illusions the similies and the raw emotions portrait in this poem is powerful and i LOVE it too the depts of my bones! 5/5

Queen Of Me

I love this poem write and when you write about anger wow you can really write lol.

The first stanza wow!! The walk through hell I love the metaphor for real life. You have been through hell with thid person you call your mother. It seems she has hurt you so many times before but I love that you take her with you. Saying that have made many flaws in your life that cannot be fixed. She is always trying to please you but in her attempts she failed and became very depressed and suicidal. As you did as eell. You were trying to scream for help but no one would listen to you. Even your own mother wouldn't listen to you so you maybe used the attempts at suicide to try to make her listen metaphorically.

You used your anger and hate for your mother to build this poem so that is great. Yes I agree with you that she burn in the fire she built after sixteen years of your life. We as humans always blame other people for our problems. It was a nice change of pace there. No I don't believe you did anything to deserve this but remember you are so strong inside of you. The past is very haunting and the memories are all drawn out here really so I love how you did that. The scars are a nice touch to a very sad poem. They are your war paint in the battle of life.

Lies even one can tear anyone part. That is sad it happened to you though because you deserve happiness. I love the thunder too because when I hear it I can see the anger in your eyes and heart. There are always a storm of emotions..... I love it because the rain can represent tears and the thunder is anger so on...you want to be there yes. So see karma win and it might make you happy I hope it does. You are the one who wishes it... now all you can do is wait.

I agree with the devil line because he makes us hurt anyone he wants to I feel. It seems like his hold on her is gripping. I think in reality we all want to see our loved ones pass on but to stop their suffering. I am glad uou are willing to stay strong for thats who you are inside. The images are so damn powerful here you paint a great picture. 5/5