Comments : Faces in the crowd

  • 11 years ago

    by ah satan 666

    @.@!!!

    "I am that different I can not be
    a tiny spec in life;
    why can't I be a normal girl?,
    why can't I be another
    face in the crowd?.

    ^^ I think it may work better this way...

    Am i that different,I can not be
    a tiny spec in life?...
    Why can't I be a normal girl?...
    why can't I be another
    face in the crowd?.

    You've penned this well matey...
    Small/narrow minded people grate me...
    We all bleed and breath the same and we all want the same thing...
    a long, full and happy life before we're gone.

    Nominated kiddo :)
    Into my favourites

    Edit:

    "Sable water lives upon my cheeks.
    These quivering lips could tell a story
    if you would acknowledge,
    that I am one of you."

    ^^ my favourite stanza...
    also a strong opening for the poem.

  • 11 years ago

    by Marcy Lewis

    Akjdghjdgf I really love this. Added to my favorites. This is such strong piece. So beautiful.

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    I love this.

    People are so quick to judge by appearances... if you don't look the same, they treat you like you have a disease... and it's disgusting. People are equal, we need the same things to survive, we all can relate to the same problems, same feelings, etc at some point in life.

    I love the first and third stanza, they truly make this poem!