Comments : Satirical (Senryu)

  • 11 years ago

    by Wild Flower

    Oooh wow this is really strong and to the point really awesome Senryu:)

  • 11 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    A short yet meaningful poem. A lot of people often say things in a way that feels like razor blades. They do leave insivible scars and hurt yet obviously not physical. Thought I felt as though this may not have been the most original idea, I do like how it was expressed in such a form that was short and to the point and held meaning. Good job! :D

  • 11 years ago

    by Steven Croat

    And those scars recover slowly and hard...
    Well written senryu!Great job!

  • 11 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Words can damage a soul far worse than a knife.. Powerful and true. I do love your strength in senryus.. You have a true gift for wrapping the message tightly in this small form.. love this!

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Sometimes I feel like the invisible scars are much worse than any physical pain felt. Physical pain can be healed, but words that keep repeating in your mind that a loved one said sometimes never heal, just reopen at the thought.

    You captured that very well here. I love this form because it always packs a punch! Great job!

  • 11 years ago

    by Kate

    Love it. Quick. To the point. Carries a good message.

  • 11 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    I love this title as it doesn't go with the poem at all as itis ironic. Haha. The poem is serious though but so very good. The first line holds so much imagery and mmetaphor. The razor sharp tongue can hold so many secrets like a real razor. It can cut deeper because of the secrets and promises you keep. Like your second line says it does cut deeper than any knife. It can breakhearts and make eemotional scars. Words are very powerful things as they can do more harm than good. I love the story feel leading into the last line because scars inside can shine brighter than scars outside. I love this poem overall as it holds such truth! 5/5

  • 4 years ago

    by Bobby M.Peter

    colon is there at the end of the second line,so you could say two or more words about the knife and separate them by comma. That is not a problem.Well done.