Alright I will say what I didn't like about this poem and then tell you my emotion view on the second paragraph alrighty then I didn't like that you used the ";" instead of ":" because that's what you're supposed to use I also didn't like that you made it like a script when you could've easily made it into a wonderful and beautiful poem hun you really could've I do like the part(s) where you do make an amazing job on the story although it's really sad and what I didn't like was the part about that we as a poet online aren't supposed to ask on our poems for comments hun either way 5/5

Omg I wanted to cry I love my parents my mom is 70 and my dad is 69 love them all :) I liked the story
-Moria Bella Bair