Parasols in Spring

by Jaymi Lynn   Apr 30, 2013


They twirl like girls with new found passion,
With sashes of gold to match their long lashes.
What a fancy they seem! to any eye with good taste;
Once hidden in dark attics now shown off with great haste!
They are merry for spring as most of us truly are
And without it, one can not expect to travel too far.
It can dance with the leaves in a rhythmic beat
While children of all ages skip with their feet.
Its a pleasure to know that whatever boredom Winter may bring,
That it will never compare to parasols in Spring!

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  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Oh okay, I see it now... I'm glad you was able to finish it! It's beautiful! :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    I like the idea of this piece! Parasols are timeless, I adore the look.

    I like the rhyme scheme but I feel it's a little off at the beginning ... dresses and lashes don't rhyme, at least not to me? and the ending seems unfinished.

    "They twirl like girls wearing new fit dresses,"

    ^ I think the use of 'fit' is awkward ...maybe another word... I find myself reading it like "They twirl like girls wearing new sassy dresses" lol...maybe iit's because it could flow with sashes. Just a suggestion. :)

    Overall, I love the idea of parasols in spring, twirling, flaunting, grateful to be shown to the world instead of hoarded in an attic!

    Lovely write! :)

    • 11 years ago

      by Jaymi Lynn

      Oh I never got to finish the ending. did it at school and the computer was shutting down.

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