The Road

Colm,

I think what I was most fond of in this poem was the realistic imagery. You took your everyday surroundings and made a beautiful poem without having to abstract anything much. Of course you managed to make a couple of things really stand out with creative description, the reflective cats-eyes was one instance of this. It was a nice way to talk to refer to tail lights. This first stanza definitely had an eerie feel to it.

My favourite part of the poem came in the second stanza. For me I often look at people when I'm in the car and wonder where they are going or who they are. We pass by people every day not knowing a thing about them; it's scary really when you think about who they could be. I like the way you have acknowledge this by giving a variety of descriptions, the drug dealer makes me aware that you have also thought about it.

Once I got to the final stanza I started to see you were talking about directions and paths that people take, which obviously connects with the idea of driving. You're moving, the roads paths and you choose the direction you're going to take.

Also, nice use of technique used throughout this poem! I enjoyed the alliteration of the 's' sound, it reminded me of winding roads.

-Mel

This poem by far reminds me of Robert Frost's poem 'The Road Not Taken' - you open with the perfect imagery, a mysterious feel of a road that seems to not be traveled on often. One that speaks of the unknown, it's dark and empty yet you strive to see what it holds and the dreams and promises along it.

The second stanza however took me by surprise because my original thought for the poem seems to be taken in a different direction now that you speak of different professions, such that are quite unique in there own ways, makes me think of the possibilities that life has to offer us, this road could take you in so many directions.

Loved the ending, it was perfect. Every end does indeed mean a new beginning, I can see two roads merging together into one here, like you've reached your destination yet you're starting a brand new life all at the same time.

Quite the interesting, thought provoking poem. Loved this Colm!

This is such a great poem :) i love it.. So deep and beautiful

YAY you posted it! I really love this poem and it's old timey feel. I also love that you wrote this while on an adventure.

The first stanza is so interesting. Things go bump in the night but the eyes tell a story that you really aren't as alone as it seems. There are secrets and whispers around there. Sets an eerie tone.

I love then the second stanza, it's like you finally begin to peel the layers of the world back and are exposed for what is out there.. the dangers, the adventures, the mystery.

I adore the last part of the poem in closing with the magic.. an ending an a beginning. For some, a path is the beginning for something new and exciting, to rid their past. For others, it's proof of the past and they're walking towards a different way. This is just such a great poem, even with it touches of rhyme here and there ;)