Comments : The "Tug of Life".

  • 11 years ago

    by SpartanOdyssee

    Any form of criticism is welcome by the way!

  • 10 years ago

    by -Choke-On-MY-Halo-

    It flows and then it doesn't I don't really know what to make of this poem to be honest it has good qualities and it can DEFINITELY be better but I don't know what to spin of it hun so I'll rate it later hopefully you take my criticism in a good way

    -Bet

    • 10 years ago

      by SpartanOdyssee

      Hey Queen.

      Don't worry! I can handle criticism, especially when it's positive!

      This rhyme is one you need to read up loud. It's more of an invigorating speech than a poem/rhyme, haha.

      We all had our share of good times, and the somewhat less. Basically the Tug of Life, is to never let go. But sometimes you need to take a breather, regain your strength.

      I'll have another look at it soon, perhaps I could tweak it somewhat.

      Thanks for the comment anyways!

      Cheers,

      Dennis.