Comments : Yours or Mine

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I think they work perfectly, I liked that about your previous.
    Really interesting and powerful words here...and the flow is so smooth.

    x

  • 11 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Yet for the days tied
    and added up to hot air
    ballons where I don't
    feel "me", I let my mind
    start to sink.
    ^I really loved this! I let my mind start to sink makes me think you're deep in thought or perhaps not feeling at anything at all. Slight typo on balloons. Two o's!

    The second stanza made me think of how others often like to think they know everything about us, yet it's not their life, they know nothing. They don't live inside of our body to understand where we're going through and what we feel. I like the emphasis you have, if only this site had italics it would make it even better!

    Third stanza makes me think of how what people think often slightly plays an effect on what we think, and do.

    Then the last one makes me think how we are so similar no matter how we think about it.

    Hmm such a thought provoking poem. I truly wonder what the inspiration was for this poem. My interpretation seems off, yet that's what I got out of it. Well done :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Yours and mine are such empty, meaningless labels, when you realize we are all cells of His body. Blessed are those who seem to understand we are all one and act upon that knowledge. They always stand out in a crowd, and are usually fighting for an ideal to help humanity forward:)

    Intelligent poem, well done girl:)

    5/5 Ingrid
    ps: I would do away with the numbers, I find them distracting in such a small verse.