I like the rhyme in it but in my opinion, if you're doing end rhyme for most of it, you should do it for all of it. Otherwise the flow is a little weird.
Anyway, I love the romantic part of this. Very beautiful and tragic.
Yay, thanks dear. It's a pleasure to hear that from you. I'll surely work on it 'cos at times, I also find it really awkward to read. Hihihi. Thanks!^^