by Amreen May 13, 2013
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
It is late evening- |
This is a treat that would be a bonus in the pages of a novel |
I seen that title and couldn't think of anything to use for it, but o.m.g... you have definitely done it justice! Kind of a "wish upon a star" but to the moon, asking for it to guide light upon the walkway for her father's return home late at night! Such a beautiful story!! |
by Meena Krish
Adi ends his one-way conversation |
Sweetie you're a great poet, I like how you bring your writings to life. This story is so sad, many children go days without seeing their parents due to their parents job. I love this poem, you've touch my heart with this heartfelt tale because this is a reality for many poor families. I absolutely enjoy this read, please keep writing. |
My mind got completely sunk in the story. The descriptive parts in each stanza made me insist to know the end of the poem. You spoke about very important elements necessary for life like trust, hope, fear of the unknown, love and respect between family members and affection between the kid close to a hut and an important element of nature, the moon. Of course it's unique to use the features of the silent but brightning full moon as a special unspoken language by the young kid. This reveals that the moon can hear but can't talk. The kid asked the moon so respectfully and with an endless innocence to shine the village road ratherthan the hut. I think this is called altruism. This revealed how deep is the love relation between the kid and dad. |