I like the whole story and the way this painted an image.

This one is my favorite part on how smooth it sounds.

The sunset came and full moon rose
A windy beach where no one goes
To water's edge, I came along.

The rest starting with the first stanza, tellse more about the mermaid and the sea.

Beautiful song, I wonder how it will sound when sung.

Always a pleasure reading your work bro. Nicely done

A lovely read this is and it would surly be interesting to hear it in music! I also liked how the story unfolds within this song..it has the sentiments of the sea and the heart that loves the sea. Beautifully penned my friend!