In Every Dream Thy Lovely Features Rise... (Sonnet) - takeoff-

In Every Dream Thy Lovely Features Rise... (Sonnet)

(This is a poem I wrote as a spinoff, offtake, on a William Barnes Sonnet "In Every Dream Thy Lovely Features Rise" I just loved that first line. I was enamored with it and with the sonnet, overalll, and looking for a new poem to celebrate a new muse and having recently posted an offtake challenge - this being one of the poems offered to takeoff - I decided to write a poem - using that one as my base and the first line in particular as a takeoff point, and this was what i came up with. I provide the original William Barnes sonnet for comparison at the bottom of page.)

In Every Dream Thy Lovely Features Rise... (Sonnet)

In Every Dream Thy Lovely Features Rise,
Overwhelming Me, with Such Ecstasy.
You Enwrap, My Stomach, in Butterflies,
Leave, My Soul, Afluttering, with Fancy.
Entranced, I am, By Every Inch Of You,
Infatuated, As Never Before,
Hypnotized, Haunted, By Your Every Hue,
Nothing, out there, Intoxicates Me, More.

No Such Bewitchment, Have I, Ever Felt,
As The Magic, Of Your Presence, Divine.
Your Rhapsody Leaves Me, Just Simply, Spelled,
Engrossed, Enamored, is this Heart, Of Mine.
Of Bliss, Heaven, Rapture, You Do, Resound.
No Greater Paradise, out there, I've Found.

Robert Gardiner
R.G.Love

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Sonnet

In every dream thy lovely features rise;
I see them in the sunshine of the day;
Thy form is flitting still before my eyes
Where'er at eve I tread my lonely way;
In every moaning wind I hear thee say
Sweet words of consolation, while thy sighs
Seem borne along on every blast that flies;
I live, I talk with thee where'er I stray:

And yet thou never more shalt come to me
On earth, for thou art in a world of bliss,
And fairer still - if fairer thou cans't be -
Than when thou bloomed'st for a while in this.
Few be my days of loneliness and pain
Until I meet in love with thee again.

~By William Barnes ~