Ebb

Hello,

firstly, thank you for commenting on my little ditty.

Secondly, if I may, I will comment on yours.

The title 'Ebb' I know the phrase 'Ebb and flow' So I imagine this means movement away, a withdrawing possibly?

The first part paints a vivid picture and sound for me. A bathroom with a hot tap running - I hear the bubbles echoing around the confined space. You climb in and the shock of heat first on toes, then feet and legs. This is no quick cleanse though as there is a glass of bubbly. The variety does not matter as it is there to provide medicinal numbness, or as you state 'obliteration' to cover a moment in time.

Because, inadvertently,
I am drowning
^
This part is so sad. Unintentional suffering due to other stimuli.

in the disparaging eyes
^
the word 'disparaging' is full of emotional content. It is a very human one and one that society often inflicts. Prejudices for example: Gender, sex, race, religion. I think this one may be gender...I will explain.

that stick into me like
so many doctors needles,
pricking
my tears
^
This section is most intriguing of all. Peoples comments and behaviours often cause more emotional pain than the physical variety. Here you liken the pain to needles being stuck into flesh. This creates an excellent visual and memory of pain. Most people know this pain and will, like me, recoil at its mere mention. I am unsure if the reference to 'doctors' was simply to make sure the readers do not confuse the needle for an addicts needle, or the disparaging eyes are medical? I think the former? The fact that the needles are bursting tears heightens their damage. This part is so unique.

and leaving me wondering
whatever happened
to tact.
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Sarcasm, I like it. My Gran used to say it was the lowest form of wit. Personally, like here it is called for.
Okay, a comment blurted out by a person who should know better. To maximise the damage if this occurred in front of family/ friends then a lasting painful memory would be the result.

I sink to my lips
and I
swallow.
^
Finally, an awful ending. The image is crystal clear and made me say 'oh my god' out loud. The image of drowning to put an end to the misery and pain shows how awful this was for you. A shocking end to this poem.

There is so much to write about so few words. The format is perfect and I could not critisise it all. The title is short, but it actually speaks volumes. To withdraw from a cruel life that inflicts so much pain.

Take care,

Michael