Comments : The Fire Still Burns

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    First stanza: Nice opening. I like the imagery of the pictures laying all across the floor, you picking each one up and examining each one closing, realizing that was a different time... you both are two different people now. Really a heartbreaking moment here, the realization.

    Second stanza: Remembering the past here... how love radiated past the sky and how you assured family/friends that it would last, that you two were meant to be together.

    Third stanza: I like the mention of prince/princess here... and how you both knew he wasn't a prince, but he was YOUR prince...and you were HIS princess... and that was enough.

    Fourth stanza: I love "wings of melodies" ... very lovely. This stanza shows hope and patience. That no matter what, you will not give up on the love you both once shared.

    Ending: Absolutely amazing ending, love how after seeing the photos and remembering the past... you realize that the only difference between you two is your appearance, that you've grown older... that the love you had is still alive.

    Great write!!! :)

  • 11 years ago

    by average thoughts

    I won't give-up or see
    past the blueness in your eyes.

    Drawing me in like the vast
    ocean..

    EA..Shante.

  • 11 years ago

    by Steven Croat

    Great way how you lead the yarn of the poem by memory!
    So it is nice and deep :)
    Well written!

  • 11 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    I love this so much . What a beautiful love poem , I like
    How you mentioned there eyes because everything else changed but the eyes, I loved how you said he wasn't a princess but you could see things in him ,
    The whole poem has a really big meaning a lot
    Will relate , awesome poem

  • 11 years ago

    by crystaljean88

    My favorite stanza was

    I outlay all our memories
    on our bedroom floor.
    I realize these two people in
    these photographs don't
    exist anymore

    i can relate to this piece very much and it almost brought tears to my eyes because of how emotional it is.. very nice job

  • 11 years ago

    by xXxMidnight SoulxXx

    Awwwww i really loved the begining i mean i know that people move on and you made it SOOO beautiful i'm actually jealous!!!!5/5 awesome poem my dear friend

    Demitrius

  • 11 years ago

    by Formidable Muse

    I really appreciate the rhyme scheme throughout this poem.

    I outlay all our memories
    on our bedroom floor.
    I realize these two people in
    these photographs don't
    exist anymore.

    ^ I love the image this creates, scattered photographs and a sense of nostalgia. It makes me sad to think that most everything is digital now and in the future very few people will have the chance to experience this, the nostalgic feeling of the past coming to life for brief moments in room.

    We were so young in love we
    knew the skies had no limit
    we believed in fairytales and
    assured our families and friends
    that we would live it.

    ^ The hope this radiates is rare, most are torn down by the ideas of reality and lose that fairy tale life that they've always yearned for.

    You were never a prince but
    you process qualities of,
    I am no Cinderella but I do
    know how to love.

    ^ Did you mean poses rather than process? My mind auto correct it as I read it the first time, but then questioned it the second. If you actually mean process, I apologize, just a thought.

    On the wings of melodies I know
    we can fly. I won't give-up or see
    pass the blueness in your eyes.

    ^ I really love this stanza, "wings of melodies" is such a lovely term. I also like the word association (I believe that's the proper term? because wordplay wouldn't be. But I could be off.) with flying and the blueness of eyes. I think it's clever.

    Drawing me in like the vast
    ocean, yes you keep me at bay
    and I now realize we only
    physically changed.

    I love you

    ^ More clever lines (: This poem is incredibly sweet, the story it draws out and the words you use to express the thoughts behind this infinite romance is great.

    Oh and I really missed reading your poetry btw (:

  • 11 years ago

    by Keeper of the Gates

    So sweet and young, just like love should always be... I loved it 5/5... one mistake though should it be *possess?

    I loved that 2nd stanza, I love fairy tales, I want to believe everyone deserves kind of fairy tale love story...

  • 11 years ago

    by crystaljean88

    I love this piece, no other way to say it.. this is my fave stanza

    You were never a prince but
    you prosess qualities of,
    I am no Cinderella but I do
    know how to love.

  • 11 years ago

    by DirtRoadGirl

    I loved this