I think this has a lot of possibilities. Emotional value is there for sure. I would clean up spelling etc to make it a more presentable write. Good job

I agree with TJ..the emotions in this piece really speaks and it leaves questions in the reader's mind..good write.

I also concur with TJ. There are ares's that could be worked on a bit, but the emotional value is great. Very nice write.

Its not to happiness i wrote dis, the title settles everytig. Nothing is refered to as " in loving memory" if not lost and gone.
It didt matter if my grammer or spelling was correct, dis write was as real as my thoughts at the time. Feelings cannot be based on grammer or spelling.
Bt thank you friends for appreciating even the sadest of my writes.