Appreciation

A very lovely and heartfelt poem which wholly conveys a sense of yearning and loss, with a soothing narrator who allays these fears. There are a couple of grammatical errors which I would get cleared up, as I feel it would really improve the flow of the piece. I have taken the liberty of making a few suggestions in brackets, but I found your work to be very evocative and I look forward to reading more. All the best.

I can tell,
that you are just trying to fake the smile
deep down you crumble
and feel(s) neglected by the only one your heart holds dear.
It's okay,
with time it will be clear
that with every single second that passes here
he wishes you were there
just to hold his hands and make him smile after a dreadful day,
yes that is the truth
a buried pain that comes and go(es)
only because he does what he does to make you fit in (the meaning of this line is unclear!)
Why do you worry yourself that much
while the fun is right in your heart
Look not far away from where your mind is
let your eyes wander but lock your heart for ('from' or 'to', not 'for') distraction,,
Everyday is a waking dream
a call only you can answer
We all feel out-left
(when it's our minds that cheats on us).
'when it's our minds that are unfaithful'
each dawn(ing) he wakes up
Only to give thanks you are in His life.
Don't feel unappreciated because (it's the wrong idea of the heart) 'the heart can be mistaken.' (perhaps!)

Awwwww this was cute to read it's really nice my dear! 5/5

Queen Ashlin