by Vermilion May 27, 2013
category :
Dark, fantasy /
dark, horror
This is one of my older poems, so I apologize if the quality of the poem does not meet the standards of the others. Thanks. -Vermilion |
by Redangelwings
Even though you say its one of your older poems this is still amazing. I love the graphic details you portray in your poems. They truly bring the poems to life no doubt. I truly love all the questions at the beginning. We all have to ask these questions when we get our heartbroken. I love the way you started out so strong and you get the point out.... you want to die and that is very clear here indeed. I love the use of the blade as well. As you can play with it and it can make your blood run so much. The ride of death's train I understand that feeling so well as it consumes you and then you go insane inside. Sense this is a death poem I love how you don't care how you die you just want to no matter what. I love the twisted ending too. The reason why is because she is with someone else. Beautiful write. I hope you write more. 5/5 |
by Vermilion
Thanks so much for your awesome feedback! |
This is remarkable Vermilion, outstanding poem! It almost brought me to tears, it is so sad and deep and immense!! 100/100, two thumbs up! Wonderful poem, so angry and powerful! |
by Vermilion
Thank you! |
by WintersAngel
This piece is positively dark and thrilling and exciting. Wonderful descriptions and the rhyming is awesome. It's so sad, but it's a great poem!! |
by Vermilion
Thanks! :) I was worried people wouldn't like it much because it's a little cheesy. I assure you that that's only because I was just starting poetry when I wrote this. |