Arcadia

by Athanael & Jenni Marie   May 28, 2013


Within moonlight, shadows meld together
fervidly planting butterfly kisses
lulled by honeyed fragrances of petals
spirits embracing in Arcadia
as quintessences become as one
unintermittedly roaming through
cotten candy fields together, inhaling
nature's pulsating tendencies
bodies entwining as lightning flares
consolidating carnal devotion
merging together in unity

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  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Together, you both write really well,
    I wasn't overly keen on the lack of punctuation, had to read through a few times to get it to flow but when I did, I saw that together you mesh really well...you fit together with the tone and wording...

    This piece is beautiful, and romantic, the sensuality is just right, without being too over the top...

    really nice piece :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    This poem is just pure romance. The paradise is the two lovers joining as one, completely wrapped up in each other...a really sensual and passionate piece without being explicit, very lovely.

    The imagery you two created is beyond amazing, great word usage though out. I loved shadows melding and the butterfly kisses.

    A wonderful collab, you both meshed really well together to create a very well blended love scene. :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    The free flow and imagery is wonderful and the word choice is outstanding . The poem blends a romantic theme skillfully to make an enjoyable read that almost left me speechless Great collaboration

  • 11 years ago

    by Something Diabolical

    A lot of good imagery in this. The use of language is what caught me but It took me a few reads to fully understand it as you used a lot of big words lol.

    I like the idea of "Arcadia" could it be an idea of a heaven?

    At first I thought this shouldn't be in the love section as its not your typical love poem but after a few reads I think I can understand why you put it under love. I like the fact that it kept me guessing.

    IMO the first 2 lines were the best and its what kept me wanting to read more. Again good imagery

    Overall a well written piece that flowed well.
    keep it up!
    5/5 from me

  • 11 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Love love love this! Brimming with imagery and overall the whole essence of sweet unity! Definitely a moment romantics dream about.....can't say much more but great job you two! You work wonders :]