Comments : Complacent (Senryu)

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    This is so very true, sad, wrong, but true.

    You captured this fact here that happens every day on the news. Something horrific happens that takes lives and causes great trauma and the news makes such a big deal of it at the time, but then the next day or two the story just disappears and the news changes onto the minor things like celebs being caught speeding in their cars etc.

    Your poem takes me back to a thought I have now and again; what if their was no media news? If there was never any attention for anything other than what was heard through word of mouth, would half of these things still happen? I know crime would never stop, but I just think the monsters who commit these crimes do not deserve the fame, because although they deserve to be named and shamed, as far as they are concerned they are getting attention. Not to mention the few reporters who twist and make up stories just to get their stories for the job.

    But back to your poem, I have said before and will say again, a true senryu/haiku does not just follow syllable rules of 5/7/5, it also is supposed to follow a pattern of explaining a scene in slight more detail each line, and finishing with the point of your message/scene. You seem to be able to master this art of this form which I admire. So well done.

    Your title I think is very fitting because it fits into the mind frame of the person who has committed the crime, as well as the person who has reported the news. They are satisfied with the results, so therefor go on to find another story. :/

    Very deep thinking poem for a senryu. I enjoyed, thanks.

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    I agree with Saffie that you have truly mastered the art of a senryu. You have to choose your words wisely to make a strong statement in such a little stanza. You done it flawlessly!

    Sometimes you can tell these reporters truly do not care about the news they are reporting, they just go through the motions, knowing that if they do 'well enough' they will get their payday and move on to the next 'big' story.

    Some terrible news happens and they spend like 5 minutes reporting on it, and then they spend 30 minutes on a basketball game, describing play by play, who made what shot, etc.

    Once again, you captured such a sad truth in these three lines. Great piece, please do continue with your awesome senryu's!