Oh my goodnes... u write awesome... I cud feel each n every word you wrote... i ssrsly loved it.. its fantastic...:)

This is so BEAUTIFUL.
In places, it is abstract, and in others, you plunge into reality; what a wonderful mixture.

I'm amazed.

Karla

You are outstanding, you make me wish and hope to strive to perfection like you can

I want to highlight this part:

"It is a thought moving fast,
multiplying the horizon
and swallowing the sun."

The horizon is used most of the time to show how vast something is; it can be positive (having huge dreams, possibilities, growth etc) or negative. Which in this context, I find, is leaning more on the negative. And I haven't seen hopelessness and possibly, depression, depicted this way. It's new and unique for me.
I agree with how you melded the abstract vs. the concrete was exquisite but never straying from the original thought, as I find myself doing so countless times.

Wow, Just Wow, Excellent Karla!!!

Wow, Just Wow, Excellent Karla!!!

Karla, your poems are alive

Congrats on the win Karla!! I love the honesty in this poem and how you repeat to yourself the "I know" in ways of calming you....the way you portray the distance in the end feels so real to me and also how you may have been holding it in, even though it's so contrast to reality. A well-deserved win, amazing writes as always :]

Congrats on your win Karla :) I knew this poem would win.

What we feel is bigger than us.
It is a thought moving fast,
multiplying the horizon
and swallowing the sun.

Fantastic poetry my friend.

There are some memorable lines within this write that speaks for aches, distance and love. What I like is that the poem speaks to the reader, one can see and hear the writer going through these emotions..

Congrats on the win.

[Judging comment from week of 6/03/13]:

The beginning is powerful, let me tell you I can feel the intensity in the air of how the character is feeling, even just touching the surface, the author has much deeper meaning behind the lines I might never grasp, it's very personal. I love how you state the facts. I think in a stressful situation where we feel trapped, if we can say in our heads, over and over again, what we know, what is present, we can be calmed down or at least assured we have control. In this way, it's a reassurement that this is true. I liked your specific of bringing in Buddhism, how this has affected this person you are speaking about and it's a starting point for them to build on to heal. There is such a desire the author is expressing when saying this person grew inside her, and maybe showed her the bigger meaning of life, opening her heart up.... the inability therefore, further on, to find that again in the present moment is terrifying. I really feel in the next few stanzas that the author has somehow distanced herself from reality and this person, wishing she could not, but not always knowing what's a dreamy part of her past and what she now has to come to say. Wow, that ending gave me shivers! I absolutely love how you placed this final thought in the poem with saying, stuttering, how you cannot find these things that existed because you and this person's relationship never did. A moving, thoughtful write through and through.