by Hannah Lizette May 31, 2013
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
And as you hitchhiked between |
by Piogga
Great use of alliteration once again. The sound of "sooty saloons" is marvelous. On the same line though, might I suggest dropping for to the next line? I think the sibilance would be used to its full advantage, the hissing sound giving the effect of the abandoned venue, pausing before the next thought is presented. But maybe it's just me. |
It feels like Alice in wonderland in psychopath mode... |
It feels like Alice in wonderland in psychopath mode... |
I love how fleeting this poem feels -- the flow of it is beautiful, and very serene. The diction is very fitting to the poem and I feel as if you did a beautiful job. C: |
by Jenni Marie
Hannah, I read your poetry often but don't always comment. This is because though I find your poetry beautiful, I don't always understand it. |