Wow, I really felt drawn into this. I like how your poems always sound like they could easily be lyrics, I straight away seem to pick up a beat and start almost rapping them in my head rather than read them. Maybe it is just me but I do not seem to do this often but when I come to yours I do?

I really liked the expression of deep pain here and a little cryptic story of characters but not much detail about them, more detail of the pain itself.

Well done.