This was beautiful. It seemed as if I was there watching her wait, then if felt helpless as I watched her be taken away. So emotional, it had me in tears. Excellent write.

The introduction to this piece is wonderful and it really does pull the reader in. I love how you were able to interest the reader by being so bizarre without making it so strange that they lose interest. The way you told this story is amazing and the style you chose was really well done for being something so simple. I think that your setting was unique and the way your voice shows here is also quite different from the norm. I think that this is a very well crafted piece and it definitely made me stop and think. I read this three or four times before I fully grasped all the details you included. Nice job.