The title was unsuspecting, this is a very different write coming from you. I am impressed. The rhyme is good here, not too much, and you kept your words fairly simple. I love the use of the grunge, denim roses and dark eye makeup.. I had the impression of a diner for some reason. I enjoyed reading this, one correction however, it should be "Sent your mind reeling" not "Scent*". Again, great job Andrew!

This is really unique, and it goes perfect with you style. It's cryptic enough for readers to understand but to still have a special meaning for yourself. This seems like the speaker is retracing his memories of her, being reminding himself why he loves her. I love the imagery.

It reminds me the movie Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind, like how the the main character had only fragments of memories. While some of the details were distorted his main focus was always on her, so he remembered everything about her. At least, that's what I saw. And since you mentioned the '60s, that made the imagery even more lively to me. It makes me feel carefree. I really enjoyed this, Andrew :)

I agree with your friend about the Hardees, it was a forced rhyme lol...anf a bit funny, where I actually took this to be a serious piece, but aside from that..I enjoyed this!! I LOVE your descriptions here...details helped paint the picture of this person and of the scene.

This is really creative and I actually liked the rhymes. Well done.