Friendship Status, Equals Pending

by Tim   Jun 16, 2013


You've been given everything,
But you've given nothing back.
With one hand out to take,
And the other to give a slap.

To swindle and scrounge,
Then knock people down.
This is all I have found. That...
Cycle's go around and around.

It's getting late, time is ending,
There will be, no more spendng.
Forget about, all the lending,
Friendship status, equals pending.

You've been given everything,
But you've given nothing back.
With one hand out to take,
And the other to give a slap.

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  • 11 years ago

    by Kate

    I like the almost song quality the poem has by repeating the first stanza at the end of the poem. It adds a nice flair to it, definitely :)

    For this part here:
    "This is all I have found. That...
    Cycle's go around and around."

    Instead of putting the period there, use a colon because that is what you have found, know what I mean? And take out the "..." Since it isn't really needed unless you want the dramatic pause and all.

    Other than that I like the message. Taking and giving nothing in return.

    • 11 years ago

      by Tim

      Cheers again Kate. You give good advice.

      I like your suggestion, that is a better way of doing it I agree.

      And I will have a look and comment on some of your writings tomorrow.

      Tim

  • 11 years ago

    by ThebutterfliesMuse

    Your welcome I will always be honest.. bad or good I hope your ok with that.

    • 11 years ago

      by Tim

      Thanks james. Honesty is all that I ask for mate. :)

  • 11 years ago

    by ThebutterfliesMuse

    Hmm I guess I dont understand this poem very well... but I think its really good. Its hard to make friends in this world. 5/5

    • 11 years ago

      by Tim

      That's a good point james. :) maybe I should try and be more clear with my writings. Especially the ones im posting on here. Thanks for the advice.

    • 11 years ago

      by Tim

      That's a good point james. :) maybe I should try and be more clear with my writings. Especially the ones im posting on here. Thanks for the advice.

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