Comments : Friendship Status, Equals Pending

  • 11 years ago

    by ThebutterfliesMuse

    Hmm I guess I dont understand this poem very well... but I think its really good. Its hard to make friends in this world. 5/5

    • 11 years ago

      by Tim

      That's a good point james. :) maybe I should try and be more clear with my writings. Especially the ones im posting on here. Thanks for the advice.

    • 11 years ago

      by Tim

      That's a good point james. :) maybe I should try and be more clear with my writings. Especially the ones im posting on here. Thanks for the advice.

  • 11 years ago

    by ThebutterfliesMuse

    Your welcome I will always be honest.. bad or good I hope your ok with that.

    • 11 years ago

      by Tim

      Thanks james. Honesty is all that I ask for mate. :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Kate

    I like the almost song quality the poem has by repeating the first stanza at the end of the poem. It adds a nice flair to it, definitely :)

    For this part here:
    "This is all I have found. That...
    Cycle's go around and around."

    Instead of putting the period there, use a colon because that is what you have found, know what I mean? And take out the "..." Since it isn't really needed unless you want the dramatic pause and all.

    Other than that I like the message. Taking and giving nothing in return.

    • 11 years ago

      by Tim

      Cheers again Kate. You give good advice.

      I like your suggestion, that is a better way of doing it I agree.

      And I will have a look and comment on some of your writings tomorrow.

      Tim