Comments : Monotonous Stab

  • 11 years ago

    by ThebutterfliesMuse

    Wow tim this poem is very unique. We all know we go through this. We all seek help. I love how the end of this poem is a twist. I love how the whole poem is dark and the very last line is calming and loving. Your mind has great ideas 5/5

    • 11 years ago

      by Tim

      I'm glad you think so. I know my flow in this one is a little off, I'm not used to writing prose like this. But thought I'd give it a go today... I hope that it will come. - Thanks for the feedback. You inspire me to keep writing.

  • 11 years ago

    by Kate

    I like the way it flows. Very smooth and nice. Great job.

    It works pretty well and I like the message. The idea of voices in someone's head and the need for self harm. It is a nice combination.

    Lovely write :)