by crystaljean88 Jun 18, 2013
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Love, romance /
secret love
All the wrong I do, |
I'm not really sure where you were going with the rhyme scheme here, because you didn't establish it in the first two stanzas, then in the last two stanzas, the first and second line rhymed as well as then the third and fourth with each other. I would work on that to either have this poem be free verse or have internal rhyming....then the flow could be a lot smoother and you wouldn't be as restricted to choose a certain number of words. |
by L
A rocky flow, but the emotion comes afloat. |
by L
A rocky flow, but the emotion comes afloat. |
by ThebutterfliesMuse
This poem was good I loved the emotion and passion. Just one thing though the flow seemed a little off in spots because of the rhyming. I would love to see no rhyming or all rhyming. But overall good 4/5 |