by Tara Kay
Wow! Maryanne this is just so beautiful, and poetic, how you incorporated the dances and got the flow spot on as well, I could vision the dances in my head as I read this...even though im on a work break and can hear the children in the background. |
I'm in love with your opening...that feeling of fingertips slowly tiptoeing up the spine, it's sends goosebumps all the way to your heart. The addition of 'poetically' is so nice. It's gives off a reference that he inspires you by doing these things, that you know you will be writing about this moment you shared later... or at least what I got from it. :) |
Ah you did such a wonderful job! The dances are perfectly used among your words. It's as if I can see them dancing while I read. Loved the mountain metaphor.. I feel its so perfect and different like each step is a step of trust and devotion in love. I too appreciated the country road mentioned! Beautiful poem :) |