Comments : We Should Be (alt. version)

  • 11 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    You weave a journey in this piece and also a sense of desire to grab onto life and not waste a second of it.

    Very simply expressed but sometimes that is the best way to get a message across, especially with the last line, like to do only that would be everything in itself that you'd ever need. Keep writing!

  • 11 years ago

    by Timothy

    The writer here clearly has a way with words; each line has an overt and direct effect upon the reader, sweet and sharp in their approach. The pastoral imagery of "wind", "coast" and "storm" are too indicative of the universal beauty that are indicated by the title; I guess, in this respect, the writer encompasses 'everything' natural in order to achieve a sense of complete involvement and so 'universal beauty'.
    The last stanza clarifies these points and provides a feeling of closure; total enjoyment.

  • 10 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Its like Ying and Yang, there isn't one without another, a match made to balance nature. I like the meaning in this write and the way you have expressed it...excellent!