Sea-change

Judge comment:

The Huntress took me on a captivating tongue twisting adventure of words and I truly love this piece from her. What a thrilling read! Full of romance and elegantly structured lines, I cant begin to express how beautiful this piece is... A must read by all!

I want to highlight the ending lines because this is where I got lost in a sea of pearled words and simply fell in love with this poem!

"like a seamaid
it ebbs
at the Arctic sculpture
it pines
for the umbrae beneath
the split
you spit
a lemony seed, like broken
mosaic, and we're mouths
at sea, we see
sea-change "

The Huntress has left me speechless with this piece, love it!

Okay, it's working. ^^

I'm so happy that you have been writing a lot lately. Your Cha Cha poem is just beautiful. I love this one. I mean LOOK at the alliterations! You suck.

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This reminded me of the Red Lobster commercial at the end where they say "we sea food differently" lol.. I adore puns and when people use them to create something so beautiful and precious like this write!

The images were anything short of ordinary and this poem calmed me- I liked how it kind of had a rhythm, at least when I was reading it, I pictured waves rushing back and forth.

Great job! :]

OMG! I love the use of pun and clever play on words in this poem! I had to catch my breath after reading this poem due to its syntax and well-patterned word stressed, thanks to these for now, this poem has a much natural flow and smooth rhythm.

What's funny is the absence of period in the end. Now, do you feel happy when you torture your readers like this? Lol

I also love the use of alliteration, homonym and extended metaphors in this clever and impressive piece of yours.