Reality

by Dakota Jun 26, 2013 category : Life, society / other

The only thing real
is the pain keeping me here.
I cannot really feel,
so I haven't a fear.
I cannot ever heal,
from the scars you left here.

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11 years ago
by Jessica

Amazing 5/5 :)
11 years ago
by ThebutterfliesMuse

Its ok but I agree with kate break it down different or write more to it. The rhyming was good but the flow just seemed off.
- 11 years ago
  by Dakota
  
  Ok. ill try and write more into it
11 years ago
by ThebutterfliesMuse

Its ok but I agree with kate break it down different or write more to it. The rhyming was good but the flow just seemed off.
11 years ago
by Kate

I like the rhyme in parts but maybe you should break it up different so it isn't just a paragraph. It might flow a little better.
- 11 years ago
  by Dakota
  
  Ok. thanks
11 years ago
by CathyButterflyJC

Wow I love the way you put this insanely amazing!!!

Dakota