by Mona Jun 29, 2013
category :
Dark, fantasy /
fantasy, mystical
As I puff on my last cigarette |
Very sad write, you express your solitude in a tangible way as well as lament maybe for a life that isn't filled with questions and the unknown.... I like the opening lines how you describe parts of your body being this and that, but how in the end, it doesn't even matter because this sadness is basically like your only vision. Don't give up hope though that there will be other things in life, sadness won't dominate..... Good image with the moonlight in the end, definitely felt the dream-like quality to it as well as a hopeless surrender to the night, to become nothing special and just a particle of dust. You expressed a lot of emotion with few lines. |
by Mona
Thankyou very much for reading my poem and my god that is an amazing commentary you wrote! Believe it or not, what you've written is so accurate that I am amazed! (: |